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nightmorph    08/03/18 04:38:46

  Modified:             jffnms.xml
  Log:
  The spelling, grammar, capitalization, punctuation, and various useless things in this doc suck. Fixed.

Revision  Changes    Path
1.10                 xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml

file : http://sources.gentoo.org/viewcvs.py/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml?rev=1.10&view=markup
plain: http://sources.gentoo.org/viewcvs.py/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml?rev=1.10&content-type=text/plain
diff : http://sources.gentoo.org/viewcvs.py/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml?r1=1.9&r2=1.10

Index: jffnms.xml
===================================================================
RCS file: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.9
retrieving revision 1.10
diff -u -r1.9 -r1.10
--- jffnms.xml	18 Mar 2008 04:30:57 -0000	1.9
+++ jffnms.xml	18 Mar 2008 04:38:46 -0000	1.10
@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 <?xml version="1.0" encoding="UTF-8"?>
 <!DOCTYPE guide SYSTEM "/dtd/guide.dtd">
-<!-- $Header: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml,v 1.9 2008/03/18 04:30:57 nightmorph Exp $ -->
+<!-- $Header: /var/cvsroot/gentoo/xml/htdocs/doc/en/jffnms.xml,v 1.10 2008/03/18 04:38:46 nightmorph Exp $ -->
 
 <guide link="/doc/en/jffnms.xml" lang="en">
 <title>Jffnms Installation and Setup Guide</title>
@@ -42,12 +42,11 @@
 <chapter>
 <title>Initial Setup</title>
 <section>
-<title>Choosing your use flags</title>
+<title>Choosing your USE flags</title>
 <body>
 
 <p>
-In order to better fit your needs, Jffnms ebuild has the following USE Flags
-available:
+The Jffnms ebuild has the following USE flags available:
 </p>
 
 <table>
@@ -74,12 +73,12 @@
 </body>
 </section>
 <section>
-<title>USE Flags for PHP</title>
+<title>USE flags for PHP</title>
 <body>
 
 <p>
-Being written in PHP, Jffnms is heavily dependent on php USE Flags. In order to
-install Jffnms successfully, you are required to have your php package installed
+Being written in PHP, Jffnms is heavily dependent on PHP USE flags. In order to
+install Jffnms successfully, you are required to have your PHP package installed
 with (at least) the following USE flags:
 </p>
 
@@ -139,7 +138,7 @@
 <body>
 
 <warn>
-This very basic configuration procedure for apache does not cover all aspects
+This very basic configuration procedure for Apache does not cover all aspects
 of setting up a web server.
 </warn>
 
@@ -148,14 +147,12 @@
 remote server. If this is your case, it is very likely that you don't have an
 apache setup running. Don't worry about installing apache though, Portage has
 already done that for you. Nevertheless, you still have to configure and test
-apache, which (luckily) is pretty straightforward. Start by adding apache to
+apache, which (luckily) is pretty straightforward. Start by adding Apache to
 your default runlevel:
 </p>
 
-<pre caption="Adding apache 2 to the default runlevel">
+<pre caption="Adding apache2 to the default runlevel">
 # <i>rc-update add apache2 default</i>
- * apache2 added to runlevel default
- * rc-update complete.
 </pre>
 
 <p>
@@ -198,7 +195,7 @@
 <body>
 
 <p>
-Now that apache is running, it is time to configure PHP. Jffnms requires that
+Now that Apache is running, it is time to configure PHP. Jffnms requires that
 you set some variables in php.ini in order to run. The <path>php.ini</path> file
 is usually located in <path>/etc/php/apache2-php5/php.ini</path>. You have to
 set these variables to the following values:
@@ -229,14 +226,14 @@
 Jffnms allows you to use either PostgreSQL or MySQL as its database. Here we'll
 show you how to create the database and necessary tables where Jffnms will
 store its data.  It's important to note that it isn't necessary to have a
-database running localy to run Jffnms and except for the fact that you need to
+database running locally to run Jffnms and except for the fact that you need to
 run this commands on the remote host, the procedure is the same.
 </p>
 
 </body>
 </section>
 <section>
-<title>Setting Up PostgreSQL</title>
+<title>Setting up PostgreSQL</title>
 <body>
 
 <note>
@@ -297,14 +294,14 @@
 </pre>
 
 <p>
-Once you have run those steps, PostgreSQL database configuration for Jffnms
+Once you have run those steps, the PostgreSQL database configuration for Jffnms
 should be ok.
 </p>
 
 </body>
 </section>
 <section>
-<title>Using MySQL as database.</title>
+<title>Using MySQL as database</title>
 <body>
 
 <warn>
@@ -367,7 +364,7 @@
 </body>
 </section>
 <section>
-<title>Final Setup</title>
+<title>Final setup</title>
 <body>
 
 <p>
@@ -389,11 +386,10 @@
 <chapter>
 <title>Support</title>
 <section>
-<title>Support</title>
 <body>
 
 <p>
-Though Jffnms is a wonderful software, it is a bit hard to get it up and
+Though Jffnms is a wonderful application, it is a bit hard to get it up and
 running. So if you run into problems with Jffnms, there are some places where
 you can look for help:
 </p>



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